Thesis-
the gang culture in America needs to be regulated in order to ensure the safety of our nations youth.
First topic-
what draws teen youth to join gangs?
Second topic-
what constitutes a gang?
Third topic-
what was the average childhood of a gang member?
Conclusion-
unless law enforcement or the community set up programs and preventative aid for troubled youth the gangs in America will continue to grow.
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Hello!
So i totally agree with you on your opinion towards the structure of this class - meeting one time a week for almost two hours is just enough. I like to write, but more towards the creative writing aspect. For not sentence structure dealio, your topic sentences are fine, just need to add in some supporting details to back those main points
I agree with your comments about the class too...Just think that you were supposed to add topic sentences not just ideas for those body paragraphs...other than that pretty good ideas...
Nate-
Your thesis and conclusion don't really coincide with your body paragraphs. You begin and end with an argumentative tone, but that's not how you want to structure and ethnography. Instead, just focus on the informative format.
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