analysis paragraph

some key features for an analysis paper would be to find background information on the topic. who created it and why? what is it about? and how did you interpret it? the purpose of the topic.  

online ethnography website

this is the link to the website in which i found my example of an ethnography paper written about my topic.

http://bjc.oxfordjournals.org/cgi/content/short/48/1/116?rss=1

topic sentence worksheet

Thesis-
the gang culture in America needs to be regulated in order to ensure the safety of our nations youth.

First topic-
what draws teen youth to join gangs?

Second topic-
what constitutes a gang?

Third topic-
what was the average childhood of a gang member?

Conclusion-
unless law enforcement or the community set up programs and preventative aid for troubled youth the gangs in America will continue to grow.

class structure

• i feel that it is helping me in my research and amount of content i put into my assignments. i get to work on my own time schedule and on my own pace. i dont feel rushed and i enjoy the freedom.
  
• yes, i believe it is a benefit because i like to see what people think about my ideas. i dont mind anybody making comments on my submissions.
  
• i am starting to understand it more now then i did before.

• i highly recommend this structure over the regular structure. i feel that meeting one time a week for class is more than enough. i personaly do not enjoy english class nor do i enjoy writting so much. i realize it is a requierment for school and i must take it in order to pursue my goals but other than that i would never have taken this course. although i do enjoy reading.

definition paragraph

an educated person has the ability to use his intellectualism for the greater good of man kind. well educated people rarely result to violence when handling serious issues. "a mind is a terrible thing to waste", said by an educated person. educated people know right from wrong and usually become very wealthy due to their intelligence. 

response to peer review

i think the review was semi helpful. i got some good ideas about how to better my paper, but i would rather hear it from the persons mouth instead of reading it from a piece of paper. i hope next time we can divide into groups and peer review each others papers and receive better results within the group. 

interested subcultures

the two subcultures i am interested in writing about would be:

1) gangs 

-what is the attraction for youth to join them? 

-even thought they know the risks why do they still join? 

-what is the gangs appeal? 

-what is the meaning of the "sign's" they use with their hands? 

-the reasons behind the colors and the way they dress? 

2) goths 

-what is the appeal to wearing all black and listening to a certain kind of music? 

-what do they do for entertainment? 

-how do they feel about what people think about them? 

-are they angry? 

project proposal

my paper will be on the over crowding of prison systems and how new ideas might be able to help our country deal with the growing number of inmates. i will start off the paper by suppling the reader with vital information about how crowded the prisons actually are and what we are doing about it today. then i will go into alternate ideas about how to deal with the growing numbers. the argument side will come from the idea that because these people have chosen to do what they did they have lost most of the rights that we as citizens have. the inmates are in affect, property of the government, therefore if the government wants to put the inmates in tents outside or send them to different countries to due their time, the inmates have no say in the matter. my paper will be truthful, shocking, and eye opening to the growing problem of an out of control prison population. 

research exercise 2

nathan mutchnick

Eng 1050

research exercise #2 

topic choice: over crowded prisons

Works Cited - article one

Brett, Collins. "Prisons overflowing." AAP General News Wire. Sydney: Jan 28, 2005. pg 1

document URL: http://proquest.umi.com/pqdweb?did=837418021&sid=2&Fmt=3&clientld=32427&RQT=309&VName=PQD

Summary

the prisons and jails in Australia are operating at 108 percent over capacity. the over crowding is having a huge affect on the mental health of the prisoners. the prisoners feel that they have no alone time and therefore it is affecting their lives in a negative way. it also has an affect on the pubic when the prisoner is released. the prisoners are complaining because they dont get to choose who their roommates are. 

response

this article describes the overcrowding of australias prisons and the affects that is has on the mental health of the prisoners. i feel that prisoners have lost the right to decide where and who they room with. by committing crimes and ruining peoples lives i feel that they shouldnt have any rights at all. they have lost that ability to decide for themselves what is best. 

final topic choice

i have chosen to make my final topic about alternate choices to house prisoners. my paper will consist of different ideas in which to house, control, and manage prisoners. it will also include opinions from people who believe prisoners should have more rights than they do now and that any other plans to change the way prisoners are dealt with is unconstitutional and e-moral. 

essay reading page 582

i read the first essay on page 582. the title is called Just be nice. 

a clear and arguable position: i don't think he had a clear and arguable position because half way through reading the essay he started talking about something totally different than what was his thesis statement. 

necessary background information: he had lots of good information but it wasn't keeping with his thesis. his essay in my opinion was all over the place. 

good reasons: he might have had a lot of good reasons, but what are good reasons with out something to reason with. 

convincing support for each reason: i dont believe he had convincing support for his reasons. he lost my interest halfway into the essay. 

appeals to readers values: he didnt appeal to my values because he didnt structure his essay good enough. it is very hard for me to fallow a essay when it is all over the place with conflicting information. 

a trustworthy tone: i didnt think he had a trust worthy tone. he didnt keep my interest and even if what he was saying was valid and would benefit my values, the way he set up his essay, i would not have supported him. 

careful consideration of other positions: he tried to be considerate and did a good job at doing so. he made a point of including both arguments and i think he did a good job on this portion. 

essay readings